By Joed EsperanceThis semester has been tough for me, first he devastation of Haiti, and then I had to break the news of the loss of my grandfather to my father. En route from Florida to NYC I received an email from my mother of my family’ school in Haiti. The newly built & recently inaugurated (2months ago) school has been reduced to rubble. Thankfully, no children were inside the building at the time of the calamity.
November 17th, 2009 served, as a special day for me I just left school for a flight Miami, to be in Haiti the following day to inaugurate my grandmother’s school. Fernande Valme born in Leogane, Haiti, became known for prayer session, the spread of the gospel, philanthropy & charity. Stating prayer meetings in her home, expanding to a basement of a Brooklyn apartment building. People came from all over forcing causing the basement, to be no place to house the visitors, landing them at their current location at 1120 Flatbush Ave.
My grandmother’s dream was to build a hospital, ch
urch & school in Haiti. In 2007, God blessed my grandmother to break land in Haiti where the school was to be constructed. May 19th, 2008 the ord called her home Which is why November 18th,2009, meant the world to me. I came back to NY the next day with pictures for Facebook & a new attitude of Gratitude.
This is the results of the school after January 12th,2010 quake and we’re not allowing this to tear us down The kids need the school & we need your hands to rebuild. Unity creates power. Please send your support, ideas & prayers towards Haiti. Thank You & God Bless. For more info please Email Esperance1617@aol.com
2 comments:
(Jared)
-Once again a heartfelt speech. I like that you worked your personal experience into an issue that affects us all in some way.
-There were just a few minor typos. For instance, in the second sentence, you wrote "he" instead of "the."
(Anne)
-I liked that you could hear your voice through this piece, you made your point, and you can tell this was an event that shook you and your family and you are passionate about rebuilding the school.
-Many grammatical errors, and I think you should tell what your grandmother is doing now and how she is trying to fundraise and rebuild the school. This will help make the paper longer.
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